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Congratulations! Write another great
sentence!
Here is a good one from a student essay
on Modernism:
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Instead of offering a whimsical,
elaborate decor, the Theatre
des Champs-Elysees suggests
a larger, social intent,
employing simple sincerity as
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Good thinking! If you can connect your
insights to your thesis statement and
organize them into a logical argument, you
will compose a terrific essay!
Here are some examples of excellent
passages from student essays:
On Candide:
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Deeming the problem of evil too
complex to fully comprehend,
Voltaire could only formulate
conjectures about the true
nature of human beings. He
believed that in place of
Original Sin, humans are born
with innate desires that
influence but do not determine
our actions. In addition, he
believed that humans act in
accordance with the nature of a
situation and often do what is
in their own best interest.
This is shown in Candide
when he has just killed two men
to save himself and Cunegunde
from being killed.
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Here is another example from a student
essay on Russian Constructivism:
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The idea of telling an artist
how he should create would make
no sense in almost any other
culture and in any other
circumstance. In Soviet Russia,
using reason and logic to
manufacture art did make sense.
By creating art that the
common people could understand
and relate to, the Communists
moved one step closer to their
goal of making a society that
could be redefined by reason, a
society that could be completely
controlled. |
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Superb writing!) |
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Congratulations! To honor your hard
work, we will share your literary genius
with the world. Here is an example from a
student essay on Conrad's Heart of
Darkness:
From this
moment on, the actual meeting
with Kurtz is an anticlimax. He
is sickly and dying: his words
have lost their power because
Marlow chooses not to believe in
them. Marlow chooses to restrain
his Id. Marlow chooses not to go
insane. On the ride back to
civilization, Kurtz continues to
engage in grandiose fantasies
and continues to hoard his
ivory, but he dies saying, ?The
horror! The horror!? (Conrad
68) He has freed his Id and
realized that it can never be
satiated. Like the lust for
ivory, at first needs seems easy
to satiate, but as you engage in
more extreme and debauched
actions, satisfaction becomes
scarcer and scarcer. Finally,
almost nothing can satiate the
burning desire for more ivory,
the burning desire to fulfill
every forbidden wish. Kurtz has
found too much ivory. Kurtz has
fulfilled too many wishes.
Kurtz dies sad and alone. He
sold his humanity for infinite
power and pleasure and dies with
no pleasure and no power to show
for it. That is horror.
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