(Awkward Phrasing. Rewrite for Clarity) Related Issues:
 


Read your writing out loud to identify sentences that need revision. (See Solecisms of George Bush)

Example:

As dogs often grow older, dogs often enjoy to have much mealtime.

While, when the sun was hot, Mr. Blob generally played several games, Mr. Blob today, because of rain, did not play a game.

Sentence Clarity and Combining (Darling et al)
Sentence Clarity and Combining (Powerpoint) (Purdue OWL)
Coherence: Transitions Between Ideas (Darling et al)

A participial phrase at the beginning of a sentence must refer to its grammatical subject. (Strunk and White)


Analyzing Coherence (Darling et al)
Sentence-Combining Skills I (Darling et al)
Sentence-Combining Skills II  (Darling et al)
Sentence-Combining Skills III (Darling et al)
Writing Concise Sentences (Darling et al)
Eliminating Wordiness (Darling et al)
Rewriting Bloated Sentences (Darling et al)
Coherence and Transitions (Darling et al)

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(Rephrase Your Sentence to Clarify Your Idea.) Related Issues:
 

Read your writing out loud to identify sentences that need revision.

Example:

The girl liked to buy things so much that she spent all her money.

The president liked his idea so much that he took it.

A participial phrase at the beginning of a sentence must refer to its grammatical subject. (Strunk and White)

Strategies for Improving Sentence Clarity (Purdue OWL)
Sentence Clarity and Combining (Darling et al)
Sentence Clarity and Combining (Powerpoint) (Purdue OWL)

Coherence: Transitions Between Ideas (Darling et al)
Coherence: Transitions Between Ideas (Darling et al)
Coherence (Purdue OWL)



Analyzing Coherence (Darling et al)
Coherence and Transitions (Darling et al)
Writing Concise Sentences (Darling et al)
Eliminating Wordiness (Darling et al)
Rewriting Bloated Sentences (Darling et al)
Coherence and Transitions (Darling et al)

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(Too Wordy. Simplify this Sentence) Related Issues:
 

Avoid wordiness by using only as many words as you need to make your point. (Warriner's 253)

Example:

Indeed, for the majority of Americans, an American Automobile is the best car that money can buy in America for driving.  

Rather than attempting to try to steal the sausage, the thief, being somewhat aware of punishments, went home.

Omit needless words. (Strunk and White)
Conciseness: Methods of Eliminating Wordiness: exercise and solutions (Purdue OWL)

Coherence: Transitions Between Ideas (Darling et al)
Sentence Clarity and Combining (Darling et al)
Sentence Clarity and Combining (Powerpoint) (Purdue OWL)
Coherence: Transitions Between Ideas (Darling et al)
Coherence (Purdue OWL)
Some Strategies for Improving Sentence Clarity  (Purdue OWL)


Analyzing Coherence (Darling et al)
Sentence-Combining Skills I (Darling et al)
Sentence-Combining Skills II  (Darling et al)
Sentence-Combining Skills III (Darling et al)
Writing Concise Sentences (Darling et al)
Eliminating Wordiness (Darling et al)
Rewriting Bloated Sentences (Darling et al)
Coherence and Transitions (Darling et al)

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(Stringy Sentence: Simplify it by breaking your idea into two or three sentences.) Related Issues:
 
 

Give variety to your writing by avoiding the stringy style which results from the overuse of and and so. (Warriner's 272-274)

Mr. Black ran every day and on Sunday he ran twice as much so he could get more exercise because he did not have work.

Monkeys climb trees so they can escape enemies and they often live in the trees.  

Avoid a succession of loose sentences. (Strunk and White)
Strategies for Improving Sentence Clarity (Purdue OWL)
Sentence Clarity and Combining (Powerpoint) (Purdue OWL)
Conciseness: Methods of Eliminating Wordiness: exercise and solution(Purdue OWL)



Coherence and Transitions (Darling et al)
Writing Concise Sentences (Darling et al)
Eliminating Wordiness (Darling et al)
Rewriting Bloated Sentences (Darling et al)
Coherence and Transitions (Darling et al)

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(Vary your sentence structure in this passage) Related Issues:
  

Experiment with the length and structure of your sentences to achieve greater interest and variety. (Warriner's 265)

Example:

Bob ran today.  Bob also fished today.  In addition, Bob also ate a big dinner.

Sentence Clarity and Combining(Powerpoint) (Purdue OWL)
Sentence Clarity and Combining (Darling, et al.)
Sentence Variety (Darling, et al.)

Appositives : exercise and answer key

Variety in Modifier Placement (Darling, et al.)
Variety in Subject Placement (Darling, et al.)


Analyzing Coherence (Darling et al)
Sentence-Combining Skills I (Darling et al)
Sentence-Combining Skills II  (Darling et al)
Sentence-Combining Skills III (Darling et al)
Writing Concise Sentences (Darling et al)
Eliminating Wordiness (Darling et al)
Rewriting Bloated Sentences (Darling et al)
Coherence and Transitions (Darling et al)

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(Your writing is uninteresting. Provide Zest.) Related Issues:
 

Place the emphatic words of a sentence at the end. (Strunk and White)

Example:

Mr. Guy went to the store one day to buy fruits, vegetables, meats, breads, and rice.  He then paid for his food and put them in his car.  He drove home and had dinner.

Adding Emphasis (Purdue Owl)
 Sentence Clarity and Combining (Powerpoint) (Purdue OWL)
Sentence Clarity and Combining (Darling, et al.)
Sentence Variety (Darling, et al.)
Avoiding Primer Language (Darling et al)
Plague Words and Phrases (Darling et al)

Variety in Modifier Placement (Darling, et al.)
Variety in Subject Placement (Darling, et al.)


Sentence-Combining Skills I (Darling et al)
Sentence-Combining Skills II  (Darling et al)
Sentence-Combining Skills III (Darling et al)
Writing Concise Sentences (Darling et al)
Eliminating Wordiness (Darling et al)
Rewriting Bloated Sentences (Darling et al)
Coherence and Transitions (Darling et al)

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