Peer Review with the Laptop
Today you are going to trade laptops with a partner and proofread your partnerís essay.
trading laptops, do the following:
1. Bold your thesis. (not the entire introductory paragraph, just the thesis idea)
2. Bold the topic sentence in each of your body paragraphs.
trade laptops, and do the following:
1. Put your name on the first page: Peer Reviewed by [Name]
2. Ask your
partner to tell you his thesis. [Donít let him read it to you.]
Write his thesis here:
3. Read his
essay, and check to see if his topic sentence for each paragraph is directly
related to his thesis.† If it is not,
change the color of the topic sentence to GREEN.
4. If you run into
a paragraph that goes on for more than a page, turn the topic sentence GREEN
and tell your partner that he will need to break this paragraph up into two
or more paragraphs, each with a new topic sentence.
5. If you
encounter a sentence which is awkward, stringy, or just plain bad, turn it RED.
6. If you
encounter a sentence which has a passive verb in it, turn the verb RED.
7. If you
encounter a sentence in which there is a word which does not quite fit, turn the
8. If you
encounter a sentence with a punctuation error in it, turn it BLUE. [Do not fix it yourself.)
9. If you
encounter an idea that is not supported by evidence from the texts, insert
the following comment: DETAIL NEEDED.
10. If you
encounter a body paragraph that does not have a quote in it from the text to
support the argument, insert the following comment: QUOTE NEEDED.
11. If you
encounter a quote or idea that still needs to be cited properly, insert the
following comment: MLA CITATION NEEDED.
read the concluding paragraph, and check to see if the thesis has undergone
some transformation. (Frequently the thesis in the conclusion is BETTER than
the one in the introduction. If that is the case, BOLD IT and yell, ďWhoopppeeee!Ē)
13. Chat with
your partner about his essay. BE NICE.