Peer Review with the Laptop
trading laptops, do the following:
1. Bold your thesis. (not the entire introductory paragraph, just the thesis idea)
2. Bold the topic sentence in each of your body paragraphs.
trade laptops, and do the following:
1. Put your name on the first page: Peer Reviewed by [Name]
Ask your partner to tell you his/her thesis. [Donít let him read it to you.]
Write his/her thesis here:
Read the essay, and check to see if the topic sentence for each
paragraph is directly related to the thesis. If
it is not, change the color of the topic sentence to GREEN.
you run into a paragraph that goes on for more than a page, turn the
topic sentence GREEN
and tell your partner that he/she will need to break this paragraph up into
two or more paragraphs, each with a new topic sentence.
you encounter a sentence which is awkward, stringy, or just plain bad,
turn it RED.
you encounter a sentence which has a passive verb in it, turn the verb RED.
you encounter a sentence in which there is a word which does not quite
fit, turn the word RED.
you encounter a sentence with a punctuation error in it, turn it BLUE. [Do
not fix it yourself.)
you encounter an idea that is not supported by evidence from the texts,
insert the following comment: DETAIL
If you encounter an assertion in your partner's argument that is not supported by a direct quote from
the text, insert the following comment: QUOTE NEEDED.
If you encounter a quote or idea that still needs to be cited properly,
insert the following comment: MLA
Carefully read the concluding paragraph, and check to see if the thesis
has undergone some transformation. (Frequently the thesis in the
conclusion is BETTER than the one in the introduction. If that is the
case, BOLD IT and yell, ďWhoopppeeee!Ē)
13. Chat with your partner about his/her essay. BE NICE.